Not for 56k-ers
Well....I think the most critical reviews you're going to get are going to be about the War and Peace load time, and the fact you used sticks.
My gripes are:
1) The plane noise is freakin loud, and it doesn't loop so much as start and stop over and over.
2) The talking clips are very very very repetitive.
3) It needs some music when nothing else is going on...otherwise it gets really slow.
My likes are:
1) When you had music going, it flowed pretty well.
2) The matrix stuff was put together decently.
3) The sniper's scope totally full of enemies was damn funny...even if it did slow down the move a lot....my suggestion, instead of using a ton of instances for a huge group scene like that, just use a static image.
Not bad...especially for a first time piece.